Ok, so for a while, I have been thinking of making a fanfic, and I know you might be angry and be thinking "god ythc, get to writing some warhammer stuff", but all in good time my friends.
So, I happen to like the show Naruto, you may not, but I would like to keep this thread to constructive criticism only (comments allowed as lon as they are G rated)...
So, if you haven't seen/heard of the show, I definatly suggest watching the episodes here:http://stage6.divx.com/Naruto-Channel---En...eos/?notice=400
It might block you the first time, but if you keep trying you should reach it....
Here yah go
Many thanks goes out to Scott Gruenburg, for getting me into the thought of writing, schooling me in Naruto and helping to produce some of the greatest and most epic ideas.“When you gaze into someone’s eyes and see the morning sun, life and hurt, past and future; love, you can proclaim you have truly lived.”
-Scott Dennis, Author
Soft steps echoed silently as the mist settled on the morning sun. The small insignificant droplets of water reflected Naruto’s movements as gazing eyes collecting the outside world. The sun peeked over one of the further hills, hitting the droplets and, for a moment, sending a rainbow swooping over the misty valley like a hawk on the hunt. Naruto’s ears twitched with each disturbance of the silence, but he barely noticed, as it had become a sixth sense to him. The sunrise reminded him of his past:
And the others. It had been so long, it had been too long.
Nearby, dew covered grass bent under a step, and the sound of the droplets pounding to the ground put Naruto on further guard then usual. Naruto’s eyes closed and he balanced his chakra as he continued on, hoping that his opponent was dim witted enough to not realize his actions.
It happened quickly, to quick for Naruto to measure. From the trees came kunai, thick chains dangling from their ends. They landed in various areas around Naruto holding him tight. Three Nin were around him within the instant, the sharp edges of blades pressed lightly around his neck, and with the flick of a wrist he could be disposed of.
“The Village Hidden in the Leaves has upped its talent I see,” Naruto thought to himself.
Ibiki spoke first, as the other two were a rank below him in ANBU, “This is Leaf Village territory and you do not have a sanctioned travel go, we will escort you to ANBU headquarters for questioning. Cooperate and you may live.” The two lower ANBU operatives moved to cover Naruto’s head. Naruto shifted to reach his kunai and Ibiki struck, slicing through flesh and:
“Water?” Ibiki asked himself. In an instant the three ANBU flew away from the target. The two lower turned to run, only to find their way blocked by their target, four of their target to be correct. The Nautos all stretched out their arms and balanced their chakra. Four small orbs of spinning chakra formed, one in each of the shadow clones’ hands. The clones’ eyes looked up, and they all whispered, “Rasengan.” The ANBU members eyes widened as the clones moved with such speed. They pulled out their swords in unison, and sliced outward. Two small puffs of smoke appeared where two of the clones had been, and small logs fell to the ground. The ANBU turned, both forming hand signals and releasing small bursts of fire. Again, the clones disappeared and were replaced with logs. From the trees came the four clones, moving quickly with their palms outward. The four spinning orbs of chakra didn’t touch the ANBU, but rather, were broken as they were an inch from the soldiers. The explosion of chakra sent the ANBU members flying, landing a short distance away unconscious.
Ibiki flew back from the target and readied his next kunai, this guys was good, whoever he was. He had replaced himself with a water clone so fast, and they hadn’t even noticed! He tapped his headset and sent a whisper through the com. link to the village. “Attention, target lost, Name: Unknown, Age: About 22, Hair Color Orange, Eye Color Blue, Prepare for a possible S-Class Nin. Hello? Hello?”
Ibiki felt a small breath of warm air down his neck as the words filled the air. “Looking for this?” called the voice. In front of him landed a small mess of wires and plastic, his radio power cell. Ibiki turned kunai slashing back into a tree, but saw no one. He dropped to a crouched defense position and started to form hand signs. From the trees came ten needles, moving quickly for different points in Ibiki’s body. The voice filled the air again, “I do not wish to kill you, your partners are just unconscious, I am heading to the leaf village on my own business, and it is no concern of yours. I mean no one harm unless harm is brought upon me. Good enough?”
“Where are you?” Ibiki screamed into the forest.
“Here!” came the whispered response. Ibiki did not have time to react as a hand grabbed his foot from underground, “Earth Style: Headhunter Jutsu!”
Ibiki found himself pulled downward into solid ground up to his neck. “Shadow Clone Jutsu!” called Naruto. Two clones appeared and Naruto offered an explanation.
“My clones will stay with you till I fell I am far enough ahead. They will then disappear. Ok?”
Naruto turned and jumped off into the forest, heading towards his goal. “The leaf village needed him more then they let on,” he thought to himself. Sending one Jonin, even one so powerful as Ibiki, and only two ANBU to take on an unknown, unmeasured and unstudied Nin. Foolish mistake.
Lee’s hands moved slowly, trying to concentrate on his movements. He had to balance. He had been at it for four hours, balancing on the thinnest top of the tallest tree.
“If I cannot balance myself for four more hours, it is six hundred laps around the village on my hands,” he called out to himself. His promise reminded him of his old Squad Leader, Guy Sensei. Lee could still barely believe how after the operation Guy had offered to adopt him as his own son.
The tap of ninja sandals upon the tree branches filled his ears. He pushed off the perch with his hands and landed. The sandals; something was different about them. The only party sent from the village today was Ibiki’s to investigate a lone Nin. But these, these were different then the Leaf Village regulation sandals. He set off, hopping from branch to branch, hoping he wasn’t missing something.
Naruto landed on the top of the Leaf Village’s Wall, hoping to be unnoticed by the people below. He set a pace for the outskirts of the city, setting his sights on the Hokage’s Residence. He moved over the rooftops silently, a black-cloaked figure moving amongst the light, yet invisible he was to the people below, only because of his training in stealth. A tall, skinny figure landed in front of him, and set himself into a Taijutsu stance.
“The reports just came back that our ANBU team was defeated, and we were alerted to watch out for any suspicious behavior. My name is Rock Lee, Ninja of the Village Hidden in the Leaves and-“ Lees words fell silent as the figure slipped off his cloak, to reveal a tall, built figure with orange hair and blue eyes. The man was dressed in a black jacket, outlined in orange, unzipped in the front with a black set of body armor underneath. He had bandages running up half his neck, but Lee knew hey covered the top half of his body.
Lee stood in silence and gazed at the changed boy before him. It had been seven years, but Lee would never forget the face of the boy who gave him will and courage. The boy who had brought Lady Tsunade to the Hokage position and once played pranks on the village. The boy who had dreamed of being Hokage. The boy; named Naruto Uzumaki.
“We never did get that fight,” Naruto called out to his old “friend” as he readied himself.
“Naruto? Naruto Uzumakl?” called Lee from down the roof.
“A lot has changed since you left Naruto, oh were to begin,” Lee laughed to himself. Naruto listened as the two walked casually towards the Hokage’s Residence over the rooftops. Naruto listened to how Sasuke had gone in search of Orochimaru two years ago, he had not been heard from since. Many believed that he had defeated Orochimaru, but Lee just hoped Sasuke was lucky enough to be alive. He heard of how Sakura had finally realized how much Lee cared for her, and how they were in love, soon to be married. He heard of Kakashi, still being his old self, and how Jiraya had come out with three new books and two movies.
He also heard of how everyone had mourned his leaving, only back two months before leaving again all those years ago. He learned of how bad Sakura and the others had taken it, and how even Sasuke had missed the push and determination Naruto had given him. He heard of how the village was in shadow for many a month. He learned of how when he left, he had taken the laughter and pranks, adventures and expectations with him. Lee told Naruto of how Hinata had stopped talking, and Ino hadn’t laughed since. All of his good friends had been destroyed a bit the day he left, and it hadn’t gotten any better.
When the pair reached the residence, Lee bid him goodbye and set off, and Naruto entered the building before him.
Tsunade felt a disturbance as she awoke; the quiet closing of her living chambers door turned her dreams to wisps of their former selves. She rose to her feet and the cold feeling of the floor sent a small chill up her spine. She prepared herself, knowing that an attack could come out of any corner at any time. From the shadows came a small group of kunai in a six-point formation, hunting for the kill like wolves in a pack. She jumped to the side as the kunai were about six feet in front of her and heard a whisper, also from the shadows, “Kunai Shadow Clone Jutsu!” The half of the room in front of Tsunade filled with kunai and she balanced her chakra and said “Wind Style: Lion’s Roar Jutsu!” Tsunade ‘s forefingers and thumbs formed a diamond in front of her chin. Her lips opened and she let out a deep breath into the diamond, blasting out the other side as a load roar and burst of air. The kunai shook and fell towards the ground, many dissipating in small puffs of smoke as the six original clacked onto the ground.
“Wind Style, very exclusive. There are only three people in the Land of Fire who could have taught you that. Good thing I know one of them too. You seem to be very skilled, but do you know this one?” The voice from the corner grew a bit louder and said, “Wind Style: Tornado Cyclone Jutsu!” A horizontal cyclone erupted from the corner shooting straight at Tsunade’s position. Tsunade knew that at the rate the cyclone was traveling she would have no time to dodge, and readied herself for the hit. The cyclone flew past Tsunade and disappeared before reaching the wall. Laughter filled the corner. From the shadows walked Naruto Uzumaki, almost falling over from loss of breath. It took a moment for Tsunade to register what had happened before she started to laugh as well.
“Naruto, you are always filled with surprises no matter how much you grow or change. So I understand you got my message, sent no response, defeated my ANBU team and came without welcome?”
“Pretty much,” said Naruto in-between laughs, “but your ANBU team was a bit unprepared and humiliating. Ibiki and only two ANBU? You hurt my feelings,” laughed Naruto. “It seems that you need me more than you let on. But at least it was a good excuse to visit.”
“ I called you here to offer you the position of top ANBU and Ninja Trainer, with a bit of training for the job standards. I know you don’t like to brag, but you are one of the best, and your skills could benefit the next generation of Leaf Village Ninja.”
“I knew this would be some kind of job offer, and I actually already made up my mind…”
Tsunade looked into Naruto’s eyes hoping that they would give some clue as to what his decision was. His deep blue ocean eyes stared back at her, and Tsunade saw more than she had expected. She watched as within Naruto’s eyes, a dance of emotions began. She saw the hatred that was behind his happy disposition as he tried to hide his life from others. She saw his actions, both those honored among others and those that had destroyed him. She saw Naruto torn over what he truly was, his actions or his feelings. Unsure how well Naruto really felt, unsure how he had continued on all these years.
And she realized something; she hadn’t really known him at all.