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 Yvette, Divination Please!
Yvette
Posted: Jul 11 2006, 09:27 PM



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|Your Info|

Nick Name (So as we dont have to call you person number 1):Yvette (Real name is: Yevetion)
Age (Can be in an age bracket like 15-19): 17
RP Experience: I have made 7 sites, and am a master at rp in 6 other sites.
How to Contact you: PM
Code: ((Edited))
Where did you find out about us: A Topsites


|Character Info|

Full Name: Yevetion Emily Hanson
Age: 21
Date of Birth: 7-12-969
Blood (Pure, Half, Muggle born): Pure
Subject you teach?: Divination

|Physical Appearance|

Eye colour: Blue
Hair Colour: Blonde
Height: 5'4
Distinguishing Characteristics: ...

Physical Description:
Her eyes are a very important feature in Yvette. She is a very sparkling lady, but her eyes give her away. They may be Blue, but they are dull. As they scan around, they just look regualr. They don't sparkle, or anything. Although they stick out in her because of their size, they are as normal as the next eye.

Her hair is the most fascinating feature about her. It is blone, shoulder-length, and smooth. Although it may be silky and smooth, it is a troublesome task to try burshing it in the morning. Her hair looks like a bush with a nest in it in the morning. It is very straight when it gets brushed, and fortunatley it stays straight for the rest of the day until the evening when her head hits the pillow in a long sleep.

She always was tall for her age. She was the tallest in her class, and people always called her Stretch, Stick, and Gaint. She hated her tallness, but it came in use sometimes. Although other times it was a disater.

Over all, she is a very skinny person. She used to be called a pole, or a stick. She was tall and skinny, and she hated it. Although her mother said that she was lucky to be skinny. Some people are over-weight, but something about Yvette kept making her think she would rather be a little over-weight then to look like a pole.

|Other|

Strengths: Her family
Weaknesses: things happening to her friends and family
Where you stand (Do you like muggle borns? How do you feel about those that prosecute muggle borns etc.): She believes that every wizard/witch is the same in every way, and shouldn't be teased by who their parents are/

Likes: Flowers, chocolates, roamantic evenings.
Dislikes: Rudeness, (She is sensitive)

Pet?: A Hippogriff jinxes to be small forever, and trained.
Wand?: Hippogriff Claw, 6 inch, Redwood

Personality Description:
She is a very friendly person. She isn't afraid to express her feelings and is outgoing. She isn't afraid to get too close to someone, and she is never rude to her students. She has very fun ideas and she isn't very boring. She never is bored because she always has something to do.

She is also a very loyal person. She thinks about friends, family, and pretty much that only in their time of her need. She would do anything for them if it is a real emergency, and even if it is just a little task. She will still do it if they need it. She is very friendly to her friends, and gives them gifts. She knows all about everyone of her friends.

She isn't afraid to express her feelings, as I said above. She doesn't care about what other people think. Unlike her sisters, she always cried, yelled, or had tantrums when she felt like it. She goofed off, joked around, made a fool of herself and it was a blast in doing so. She always said, "It is your life. Don't let someone else stop you from making it the best."


History:
She was born in Britain inlog cabin. Her parents died when she was 18, when she moved out only 3 years ago. She went to their funeral, and it was a very sad moment in her life.. When she was a little girl she wanted to become a writer, but her mother wanted her to become a teacher, as her mother was. Once her mother died, she decided to become a weaver as her mother intentioned. But then the school appeared...so she wants to now become a teacher.

When she was 3 her mother got pregenet with two twins. She hated it. She always plotted in trying to break the eggs by pounding on her mothers stomcah. Relatives came all the way from across the world to see her moms stomcah, and she hated it. She always was the center of attentions, the big star, and amazing attrcation. Not anymore. Not when the two twins were coming.

On her fourth birthday, her mother had her water break. Yvettes party was ruined because of her stupid twins. She refused to go see the little mongrals when they were alive. She even refused to go in and watched the miracle of birth. Now Yvette regrets is because she and her sisters are very close, no matter if Yvette may be the oldest.

When Yvette was 12 she met a boy. She was jumping around and playing on rocks at her favorite stream. He came and helped her when she was stuck in some rocks. Then he asked her to go to his house for lunch, and once they got back, he kissed her. It was her first kiss ever, a precsious memory.



RP Sample:
Yvette had on a white dress that came down to her knees. It had a crystal circle where the straps seperated. She also had on a white over-coat. She had on white stockings, with black buckle shoes and a white ribbon tied in her hair, holding up her ponytail. She had on a white scarf that was really fluffy. She also had on some mascara. Behind her was a white suitcase, holding all of her precsious items in it. On her neck was a very beautiful, pure diamond necklace. The diamond was carved into an angel. It was from her mother. It was a locket too, so she had a picture of her mother inside it.

"It is finally here..." She said. She walked into the Entrance hall with a great thud from her heavy shoes. She sighed and smile and then looked around in awe. "I can't believe I haven't been to a private school before...this-this-this is amazing..." She muttered to herself, as she usually talks to herself alot. She slowly took a step and heard as her footsteps noise echoed throughtout the room. She then started walking regular, amazed at how the Entrance hall looked. "Wow...I can't believe it!" She said. It reminded her of her childhood memories.

When she was a child, she went into a big castle. This castle was much like the one she went into. She smiled and walked to the stairs. She took one step, and then another. Then another, and then another. She walked up the Entrance all stairs, until she was on the balcony it led to, still in the great hall. She turned around, rested her body on the railing, and then smiled. "I love it here already." She said to herself. She took in a deep breath, closed her eyes, and let it out, taking in the happiness she inheld.
+Salazar Slytherin
Posted: Jul 11 2006, 10:56 PM



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Thank you for applying.

I am afraid that your application cannot be accepted at the moment as it does not show enough development.

The Physical Description is simply not long enough - Also, you do not have to mention her bra size to describe her assests.

The Personality description is not detailed enough. It shows very little about her and does not show a developed character.

The History is not long enough for a witch of 21. You have basically squeezed 21 years of life into 4 lines of text.

The RP sample is not long enough to show an adequate level of play.

Once these have been ammended I will review the application.
Yvette
Posted: Jul 11 2006, 11:21 PM



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There we go...is it better?
+Salazar Slytherin
Posted: Jul 11 2006, 11:31 PM



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Yvette, have you seen what date it is? 990.

You have stated that your character was born in 85. So that would have to be 985 making her - 5 or 885 making her much older. You need to either change the age or date of birth of the character.

Also you stated: At amusment parks, she couldn't ride her favoite ride when she was 11 because she was too tall...and it was meant for 12 year olds.
Amusement parks don't exist, rides certainly do not exist. Quidditch isn't even played yet.

The Code: You have part of it but another part is missing.

She would not have been born in a hospital - It is pre-medieval England (Britian is not yet formed) and hospitals do not exist.

Also, you mention Auror - they are part of the Ministry of Magic - which is not yet founded.

You mention Movies - Again, they are not around yet.

You also mentioned that her mother wanted her to become a teahcer. I don't see how this fits, Hogwarts is the first teaching establishment for witches and wizards in the world - it is only just open so her mothers plans for Yvette to be a teacher are very out of place.
Yvette
Posted: Jul 11 2006, 11:40 PM



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That is what I read for the code...and I read all the rules...

And I fixed it again
+Godric Gryffindor
Posted: Jul 12 2006, 07:37 AM


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There is another part - it is in the rules
+Godric Gryffindor
Posted: Jul 13 2006, 12:22 AM


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Just been re-reading through your application - your weakness is too generalised and as it says in the rules we need you to have at least three weaknesses.
+Godric Gryffindor
Posted: Aug 24 2006, 07:28 PM


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Denied - the applicaed has been sat her for too long now - if you still wish to play the character please do apply again


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