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Mikan Sakura, Civillian
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Member No.: 99
Joined: 25-May 07

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Name: Sakura Mikan (佐倉蜜柑) Age: 26 Position: Civilian Alice: Nullification - she can cancel out another persons Alice. When it first manifested itself, she was only able to use it on herself and she had no control whatsoever of it. But as she grew up, so did her Alice and its abilities. Now she is able to nullify someone's Alice on things or on another person. However, she is still unable to use her Alice from a far distance. She can only nullify an Alice which is within the distance of 3-4 km, she is still trying to make her Alice stronger. Physical Attributes: Mikan has now become a beautiful woman, she is about 5'7 and weights 46kg. Her hair has become curly due to the plaits she started to tie during middle school. Her hair is long and comes down to her shoulders. Mikan has a fair complexion. Mikan likes to play games with the younger children near her area, she sometimes wish she have children of her own, but she knew that would it was not yet time. She usually wears a blouse and a skirt, sometimes she also wears a pants. Personality: Mikan is quite an active girl. She likes to make friends with others and has learned to understand people easily, though not really understanding herself. Mikan is a brave girl, she is also very independent, she does not like to rely on others but tried her best to do everything by herself. She likes to help other people. Mikan is a caring girl who will do anything for the sake of her friends without thinking of her own safety. She is also the type of girl that likes to go on adventures, she also likes to explore new places. She was originally not very bright, but since she started to read books and exploring, she is now getting smarter. Strengths:~ can easily express herself ~ determined and persistent ~ as much as possible, never gives up ~ does what she believes is right ~ is willing to help a friend in need Weaknesses:~ lack of control ~ understanding herself ~ studying ~ planning things ~ solving problems --- History:She is an orphan who used to live with her grandfather in the country. When she was in second grade, Hotaru transferred to her school from the city and had a hard time fitting in with the others due to her being a genius. At first, Mikan didn't really want to be friends with Hotaru, but when they entered a dance competition and won it together she decided to be Hotaru's best friend. From then on, she cared deeply about Hotaru and they were both as close as sisters, even though their personalities are the exact opposite. When she heard that her school was going to be demolished, she led a protest to stop it, since it contained so much memories of her and Hotaru. However, no one joined her. She was shocked to hear that Hotaru was moving back to the city to go to an academy for young 'geniuses' like her. When she heard rumors that students were like slaves in Alice Academy, Mikan left her grandfather and her home to go after Hotaru by herself. She was then accepted to Alice Academy by Narumi-sensei and could attend Alice Academy with Hotaru and many other children with extraordinary powers. While she makes friends later on, she is initially accepted with skepticism by her classmates, with whom friendship she was to win as an "entrance exam" into the Academy. During her years at the academy, she learned to control her Alice and meet many people, including two boys, Ruka Nogi and Natsume Hyuuga. At first, she did not like them and thought that they were mean. But then she started trying to make them smile. Mikan was overjoyed to be with her Horatu again, she was always following her around and spending much of her time with Hotaru. Mikan helped Hotaru her work sometimes begin a guinea pig for her. After a while Mikan started to feel differently towards Natsume and Ruka, though she did not understand the feeling, she was beginning to like them. When Natsume called her by her first name, she blushed and her heart was beating really fast. When Mikan finally realize the feeling she had, it was hard for her to chose which one she wanted. In the end, she chose Natsume. She felt guilty when Natsume and Ruka's friendship drifted away. Ruka distanced himself from them both, cutting off his friendship with Natsume and Mikan. They even fought and though Mikan tried to stop them, she was unable to, finally Narumi-sensei stopped it and she was left with her friend Hotaru. Though Mikan tried many times to patch up their friendship, it was useless. Finally, Mikan knew and understood that the dance with Natsume had ended their friendship. Mikan then started to spend most of her time in the academy with Hotaru and getting to know Natsume better. She found out many things about him, such as his history and his life. She comforted him and also help him at times. After graduating from the Academy, Mikan return to her hometown accompanied by Natsume, She then settle in a house near her grandpa's, although she liked it there, she felt something was missing. Mikan was usually alone in her home, sometimes Natsume will visit her. But she felt bored and lonely most of the time, she tried going to work and even teaching a elementary school, but somehow that did not work for her. In the end, she decided that she would follow Natsume and help him out as much as she could. She got ready with her things in a few weeks and was waiting for Natsume's next return. She has explored many places and learn many new things already. She still keeps contact with the Academy and her old friends from the academy. --- Trivia:~none
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| Mikan Sakura |
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Group: Members
Posts: 6
Member No.: 99
Joined: 25-May 07

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1. Are you sure you do not want to include any trivia? - Yes I am very sure.
2. Double check your tenses and some subject-verb agreement. - according to my Microsoft word, all is fine, If there is anything wrong please inform me. Thank you
3. Most importantly....what role will you have in the site? Natsume, Ruka and Hotaru are around because they will contribute to the plot, what about you?
- Maybe I can help out Natsume or Hotaru?
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You were talking to me...?

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| QUOTE | 3. Most importantly....what role will you have in the site? Natsume, Ruka and Hotaru are around because they will contribute to the plot, what about you?
- Maybe I can help out Natsume or Hotaru? |
As it is, we're not allowing any more faculty. You CAN be a civilian inside the Academy but you will have to have a good reason to make the Academy want to welcome you back into its walls at the face of such a turmoil.
And, if ever you ARE allowed back in, what exactly will you do?
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| Mikan Sakura |
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Group: Members
Posts: 6
Member No.: 99
Joined: 25-May 07

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| QUOTE | | As it is, we're not allowing any more faculty. You CAN be a civilian inside the Academy but you will have to have a good reason to make the Academy want to welcome you back into its walls at the face of such a turmoil. |
Well I kept contact with the teachers and the headmaster decided to call her back and maybe I can be a substitute teacher or one of the people who takes care of the younger student.
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| Natsume Hyuuga |
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DA, Emo, The Hand (?) xD

Group: Outsiders/Civilians
Posts: 130
Member No.: 67
Joined: 12-February 07

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MY Microsoft Word says otherwise.
| QUOTE | | Now she is able to nullify someones Alice on things or on another person. |
Should be someone’s .
| QUOTE | | However, she is still unable to used her Alice from a far distance. |
Use
| QUOTE | | She can only nullify an Alice which is within the distant of 3-4 km, she is still trying to make her Alice stronger. |
distance.
| QUOTE | | Physical Attributes: Mikan has now become a beautiful women, she is about 5'7 and weights 46kg. |
I fell in love with only one Mikan.
| QUOTE | Weaknesses: ~ controlling her mouth which often gets her into trouble ~ controlling her temper ~ controlling her emotions |
in other words, lack of control --- moving on.
History:
| QUOTE | | Though she still wanted to be friends with Ruka, she was unable to. |
Huh?
| QUOTE | | They even fight and even though Mikan tried to stop them, she did not manage to stop them, finally Narumi-sensai stopped it and she was left with her friend Hotaru. |
Just mention that it was the dance that finally ended their friendship. And it’s sensei.
| QUOTE | | After graduating from the Academy, Mikan return to her hometown accompanied by Natsume, they then settle in a small apartment near a forest area. It was quite simple living, Natsume was always on the move. |
I guess it wasn’t clear in my profile. What I meant here was that Natsume came with Mikan, but not necessarily under the same roof. You would obviously want to be with your grampa, wouldn’t you?
| QUOTE | | Finally, she decided that she would follow Natsume and help him as much as she could. In a matter of weeks, Mikan was had already packed her thing and was awaiting for the next return of Natsume. |
I’m happy with my life going around Japan. Is that what you would want to do as well? Besides, you’d just drag me down..
| QUOTE | | She still keeps contact with the Academy, especially with the new headmaster, Narumi. She also kept contact with her old friends from the academy. |
So what did she find out? Narumi’s nearly getting kicked out, the Academy having threats of being attacked/brought down by the Hand. How EXACTLY would you be able to help us or be part of this plot? It’s already clear. We are not accepting faculty members as of the moment, so there’s no chance for you to be part of the Academy, as of the moment. You can wait for book two to come about before using this character or something. But right now, no. We can’t accommodate you.
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Trivia: ~none
Are you really sure you don’t want to add a trivia? Trivia things are the little things that add to the spice to the character. Your loss.
*EDIT And where's Hotaru and her relationship with Ruka? Read Ruka's Bio for this.
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| Mikan Sakura |
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Group: Members
Posts: 6
Member No.: 99
Joined: 25-May 07

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Edited. I already edit my bio as much as I can. Hope its ok, there are somethins I did not change yet, which is this:
| QUOTE | Finally, she decided that she would follow Natsume and help him as much as she could. In a matter of weeks, Mikan was had already packed her thing and was awaiting for the next return of Natsume.
I’m happy with my life going around Japan. Is that what you would want to do as well? Besides, you’d just drag me down.. |
Well, Mikan does always drag people down
| QUOTE | She still keeps contact with the Academy, especially with the new headmaster, Narumi. She also kept contact with her old friends from the academy.
So what did she find out? Narumi’s nearly getting kicked out, the Academy having threats of being attacked/brought down by the Hand. How EXACTLY would you be able to help us or be part of this plot? It’s already clear. We are not accepting faculty members as of the moment, so there’s no chance for you to be part of the Academy, as of the moment. You can wait for book two to come about before using this character or something. But right now, no. We can’t accommodate you. |
This is the one thing I can't edit yet, I would have to take some time to think about it.
| QUOTE | | Are you really sure you don’t want to add a trivia? Trivia things are the little things that add to the spice to the character. Your loss. |
I don't want to add because I can think of anything
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| Mikan Sakura |
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Group: Members
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Member No.: 99
Joined: 25-May 07

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| QUOTE | I know you'll drag me down so I'd rather not have you around. But you're stubborn anyway, and most probably, I just hate to admit that I like you around. Hahaha.
You can be a civilian, just like me, but it's up to you where you want to stay. I'll just be in Tokyo, but after the escape attempt thread, I'll betransferring to the Starbuko Coffee Shop branch inside the Academy. Do what you think is best for you as of the moment.
Read other profiles to have an idea of what a trivia is all about.
Kudos for asking help from us. |
Thank you for helping me out. And I will try my best with the location and trivia.
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| Natsume Hyuuga |
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DA, Emo, The Hand (?) xD

Group: Outsiders/Civilians
Posts: 130
Member No.: 67
Joined: 12-February 07

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| QUOTE | | Alice: Nullification - she can cancel out another persons Alice. When it first manifested itself, she was only able to use it on herself and she had no control whatsoever of it. |
She can cancel out another person’s Alice. When it first manifested itself, she was only able to use it on herself and had no control of it or whatsoever.
/… I refuse to spoon-feed.
| QUOTE | Physical Attributes: Mikan has now become a beautiful woman, she is about 5'7 and weights 46kg. Her hair has become curly due to the plaits she started to tie during middle school. Her hair is long and comes down to her shoulders. Mikan has a fair complexion.
Mikan likes to play games with the younger children near her area, she sometimes wish she have children of her own, but she knew that would it was not yet time. She usually wears a blouse and a skirt, sometimes she also wears a pants. |
check out other characters’ profiles to know what it means to define your character’s physical attributes.
From here on, figure it out.
| QUOTE | | Personality: Mikan is quite an active girl. She likes to make friends with others and has learn to understand people easily, |
What’s wrong with that?
| QUOTE | | though not really understanding her own self. |
What’s wrong with that one?
| QUOTE | | Mikan is a brave girl, she is also very independent, she does not like to rely on others by tried her best to do everything by herself. She likes to help other. |
What’s wrong with those?
| QUOTE | | Mikan is a caring girl who will do anything for the sake of her friends without thinking of her own safety. She is also the type of girl that likes to go on adventures, she also like to explore new places. |
| QUOTE | | She was originally not very bright, but since she started to read books, she is now getting smarter. |
Is reading books the only way to get smart? Experience pretty much adds to that.
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| QUOTE | | Mikan was overjoy to be with her Horatu again, she was always following her around and spending much of her. |
WHAT? Hotaru spends you??
| QUOTE | | When Mikan finally realize the feeling she had, it was hard for her to chose which one she wanted. |
| QUOTE | | They even fight and though Mikan tried to stop them, she was unable to, finally Narumi-sensei stopped it and she was left with her friend Hotaru. |
| QUOTE | | Finally, Mikan knew and understand that the dance with Natsume had ended their friendship. |
| QUOTE | | Mikan then started to spend most of her time in the academy with Hotaru and getting to know Natsume better. She found out many things about him. |
O rily? Like What?  | QUOTE | | After graduating from the Academy, Mikan return to her hometown accompanied by Natsume, |
| QUOTE | | She then settle in a house near her grandpa's, Natsume was always on the move. |
Try to separate the two ideas into two sentences and elaborate.
| QUOTE | | Mikan was usually alone in her home, sometimes Natsume will return visit her. |
What?
| QUOTE | | But she felt bored and lonely most of the time, she tried going to work and even teaching a elementary school, but somehow that did not work for her. |
| QUOTE | | Finally, she decided that she would follow Natsume and help him as much as she could. In a matter of weeks, Mikan was had already packed her thing and was awaiting for the next return of Natsume. She has explored many places and learn many new things already. She still keeps contact with the Academy, especially with the new headmaster, Narumi. She also kept contact with her old friends from the academy. |
Rephrase the whole thing.
Look, I don’t hate you, it’s nothing personal, just doing my job.
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| Mikan Sakura |
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Group: Members
Posts: 6
Member No.: 99
Joined: 25-May 07

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Edited
| QUOTE | Alice: Nullification - she can cancel out another persons Alice. When it first manifested itself, she was only able to use it on herself and she had no control whatsoever of it.
She can cancel out another person’s Alice. When it first manifested itself, she was only able to use it on herself and had no control of it or whatsoever.
/… I refuse to spoon-feed. |
I am sorry, I don't get what you mean here.
| QUOTE | | check out other characters’ profiles to know what it means to define your character’s physical attributes. |
I will do it as soon as I can.
| QUOTE | | Look, I don’t hate you, it’s nothing personal, just doing my job. |
I understand it, I know you don't hate me and I am truly grateful for your help.
| QUOTE | I suggest you proofread your history one more time.
Like Manzy and Natsume have pointed out, you'll need a role. If nothing comes to mind, you can wait around for book 2. Take your time, you have lots of it.
Everything's good so far. |
I guess I will take some time with the History, and one more thing, is there a book 2? I thought there was only one. Anyway I will get my sister to help me, she is from this site too.
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