Rate My RPing Thread

Awesome! I hope you don't mind if I go first? (if you do ignore this then ^^)

I have been worried that I haven't improved at all since I wrote that Solo series, and I wanted advice and comments on my RPing in general. This might likely change once people see my Crest Topic, but I don't feel like waiting.

I've recently decided that I'm going to read every thread that's ever been written in character on the site for two reasons:

1) As a writer, I need to read all the time, and I need to read everything. The main idea is that when I read all of them, I'll have a better understanding of how other members (or the ones that are actually active) write their material. This way, I can take tiny bits of everyone else's style and incorporate it into my writing.

2) Reading every thread on the site will help me learn what mistakes other members made so I can avoid them in the future. Not that I won't make mistakes in the future, but the purpose of making mistake is so you learn not to make THOSE mistakes again. Savvy?

Zander, from what I've read, I don't think it's a matter of how much you've improved. RPwise, I think you have improved a great deal since your solo series, but again, I don't think that is the issue here.

The only mistake that sticks out to me about that solo series was that you didn't spend more time on it before you posted the parts. I honestly think that it was okay, and I respect that you took on the task, but there could have been so much more. Don't worry about how your work was received by an audience. Instead, ask yourself before you post 'did I do my best'? If you know you did your best, then you can post it with confidence. Obviously, you didn't do your best with the solo series, and you even said it in your out of characters posts.

We all think our own works sucks and that we haven't improved. I know I do! lol I guess, I'm trying to say that your Crest topic is going to be awesome because you've taken time to work on it. I think you've done some great work, and although there will always be room for improvement (with ANYONE who wants to write) I think you're doing fine.

((Out of topic: Thanks, and I do hope you al like my CT))

I'm willing to subject myself to some constructive criticism.

From the little I've read of your posts which includes a few in Salvaging Destruction and at the shopping center, I'd say you are a pretty good writer all around. There are points at which you get a certain flow going, however, and its going smoothly but suddenly just change pace completely. Like you got tired of writing or something.

Also, perhaps a little more sentence variety. I do like your choose of dialogue though. ^^ It really seems to give the characters personality. Overall, like I said, you are a pretty good writer and you do pretty well when giving your characters personalities. Just work on your sentence variety and keeping things flowing smoothly.

+To be perfectly honest, I think the whole concept surrounding Kichou is extremely clever and original: it's not every day you see a Tamer who actively "wants out," as it were, even to the point of thinking of his partner as an annoying tag-along. Though I won't name names, we have plenty of "hero-boys" running around, many of which seem hellbent on beating Insomnia because "that's what heroes do," but I love, I love I LOVE the idea of someone desparately wanting to bring down Her Sleeplessness for purely selfish reasons.
Will Kichou ever learn to accept that Wing and the Digital World might be mixed blessings to him, and that there's more to Digi-life than striving to get home? Don't answer that, because I'm looking forward to finding out for myself way too much.

-If I had to find a flaw with your work, it'd probably be the way you belittle Wing's character - unintentionally, I'm sure, but remember, regardless of what Kichou thinks of Digimon IC, a Digimon being as developed as their Tamer is not a privalage: it's a right. Check out Vanguard in Taste of Darkness.
On top of that, your generally-good grammar has some noticeable cracks at some points (I effing HATE misuse of apostrophes), and your "narrator" isn't quite as articulate as it could be - i.e. your prose in between dialoge doesn't flow as nicely as some, but the fact that your dialoge and characters are so interesting is compensation for that.

=On the whole, I personally would expect more of someone who was so well-known and accomplished (though I don't claim to be particularly familier with Owen's adventures), but still Kichou is a very satisfying character to follow.

Well.. I don't really want anyone to rate me by my writing on here and I'd rather wait until my second character makes an appearance but I'm too impatient. ^^ Could I get some critism, maybe?

Thanks for the criticism. I'll admit I'm a pretty impatient person and I usually try and bust out a post in under twenty-minutes. I'm going to definitely try and take some more time and re-read posts.

I also plan on fleshing out Wing more and make him less of a push-over.

Inflate/Deflate my ego. Now is a great tiem since I finally got my TLk post up.

Oh, and no, you won't be treated badly, or banned, or given less money at your birthday if you hate me. You'll just receive less cookies.

Koen, I think you've found a unique writing style and I think you should continue to work with it. One problem that I have, at least when we've been in threads together, is that Furunii seems to think he's better than Koen, or that he thinks he's better off calling his own shots. Is that what you're going for? Maybe I'm misreading it.

Cleo, I haven't gotten to read any of your stuff yet, but I will soon. Same for you, Kichou!

Any criticism for me?

It's the way he acts. He wants to prove himself to Koen that he is the best partner, and show her that he is better than Shirasaki. But it doesn't work right now, since he doesn't know who Shira-kun is.

Hmm, I guess I'll have to read up before I can rate you. xD I'm sorry.

I like to call this thread "The Essential Guide to Cleo Rania's Pwnsomeness." In other words, that, barren, is all you need to read.

It's long, but so worth it, and gets even better as it goes on. There's a post on page 41 that's amazing on its own.

Actual evaluation of oneesama's back catalogue will come later, since it's going to be so hard to sum up how I feel about her and it... *sigh*

:D I must agree with GH on that thread (Cleo packs an emotional wallop that could floor Mike Tyson), but I also like the--HOLY CRAP WHERE DID IT GO? Where's LOTR?

I'd be interested to see ya'll's constructive criticism on my writing. We know it's got flaws, but I try to hide them as best I can. Go, children, it's a happy, happy scavenger hunt! ©.

LOTR is lost in Old Plot threads on DD. I'll get the link in a minute.

CRICKERU!

Gimli is mine, bitches.